lunes, 26 de junio de 2017

STOP!

I want to talk about a particular phenomenon in the public transportation system but that reflects the inefficiency of the whole system, because from these kinds of details –which, unfortunately, sometimes appear to be just insignificant things– we can look in facts the obtuseness of the system, this is not an isolated fact; this happens frequently in the city and maybe you have noticed it more than once when you go to work in the busy morning.

Monday to Friday, from 7.30 am to 10.00 pm –peak time–, there is a deviation in the traffic. So all the traffic of the avenue Jose Pedro Alessandri transits only from south to north. And the traffic that comes from the opposite direction has to deviation in the corner of Los Leones and Av. Sucre which it’s a terrible problem for the users of the Transantiago because the “caterpillar buses” are too big and the Av. Sucre it’s too small, even the normal buses are too big in compare with the size of the avenue, and in this corner all the traffic from north to south must divert, not just the public transporting.


From this it turns out that the buses DO NOT STOP at the whereabouts located on the Av. Sucre, just because in the chaos of the traffic the buses do not have how stop in the whereabouts. Every day we saw in the TV experts saying that all the problem of the Transantiago are because of the evasion of the user but this kind of problem it’s not because of the evasion of the users, ¡it’s because of the inefficient of the system!. ¡And we, the users, are the ones who has to pay the cost of all the inefficient!

1 comentario:

  1. Well done, the text xlearly shows a progress in terms of the structuring of paragraphs and and of a text as a whole piece of discourse.

    Very good attempr at using cohesive devices, and on the overall, the lexis is good, however there are several inconsistencies in terms of register, adding to it, there are several grammar and lexical mistakes that makke your text a piece to improve.

    Correction:

    " has to deviation in the corner" = have to turn in the corner.

    "Av. Sucre it’s too smal"= Av. Sucre IS too small.

    " have how stop in the whereabouts." = I do not really know what you meant.

    " Every day we saw in the TV"= every day we SEE ON TV.

    "inefficient of the system!" Inefficiency of the system.

    "the ones who has to pay the cost of all the inefficient!"= the ones who HAVE to pay the cost of inneficiencies.

    T= 3, L= 2,5 , G= 1,5 = 7 pts
    Grade: 5,5

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